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Crackhead Johny

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Re: Broken
« on: September 29, 2018, 04:54:25 pm »
The art I like.
The story I have seen so many times.

As for the masks. Where do you go with it that hasn't already been done? For masks we've had universal faces, big fake smiles, no faces, smooth faces, glitched faces, morphing faces, etc. (demons faces would be a slightly different piece or slightly different flavor to this one) you could have the masks quickly swapping between the people as they try to act like other people to be accepted.

Looking at the lack of options for something new I say stylize the masks heavily in your style.

if this was supposed to be an original series, you'd be right. this looks more like a test of skill and execution rather than see who can come up with the most original idea. its clearly just a one shot.

but it would be nice to see each mask show something different. that way when he gains his mask, we can see what face he chooses.
The problem with the "everyone wears a mask" shtick is that people want to blend so their masks are generic.

Of course the giant failing with this is the fact his "other human" was clearly wearing a mask as that allowed them to behave like all the other mask wearers. So the MC was not seeing anything true, and they never found another human before they put on the mask.

This is a problem with recycling other people's content, you have to understand it to do it properly. When you are just stealing bits, often they do not work when you do not understand them.

I would like to see the art paired with a story of its quality. The art is already a step above what all the "want to be" manga artists cap out at. I suspect the artist is younger which suggests they have a great future and may go pro.
« Last Edit: September 29, 2018, 05:04:01 pm by Crackhead Johny »

 

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