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[Oneshot] Love Game (PG-13)
« on: July 24, 2016, 05:57:18 am »
So, I just wrote this out for another site, but I figure I'll drop it here since I realize I haven't really given an example of my writing. It's just a pervy oneshot, and I'll grant that there's not much depth or anything, but I hope that I achieved my goal in portraying high school lesbian romance in an unconventional light. Please bear with me with it over potential small errors, though, seeing as I started writing at like ten past five in the morning and it's five til seven now, and I've had no sleep.

Synopsis: The president of the anime club has a dirty little secret: her libido. Who better to address this with than the greenhorn vice president who clearly has a thing for her anyway?




The anime club congregated around the meager table in the student common area. A few small conversations hardly filled the space with more than a quiet murmur. With a sigh, the club president, a rather lanky goth girl, third year, kicked her feet up onto the table.

"Y'know, we should plan a get together, maybe an anime screening at my place," she called over the noise. Being only about a dozen members, everyone quietened down quickly. Running a hand through her black hair, the president continued. "I mean, it's not like we do much else. The rest of the school thinks we're a joke." A few others sighed and nodded in understanding.

Next to her, however, the eager first year VP perked up, blonde ponytail swishing behind her. "I-I think it's a great idea! We can use the club's entrance fees to help pay for the snacks and stuff, right?" Her energy was almost cute, in an odd, diligent way.

The poor girl was going to work herself to death one of these days because of it, and with that same determined smile.

Pushing the thought from her mind, the president returned to the topic at hand. "So, that the case, treasurer?" she called, turning that classic green-eyed glare on the third year boy. He flinched before offering a small nod. A smile curled at her lips. "Good. It's probably best to do it next month, so we'll discuss date and time at the next meeting. That'll be all for today."

As the other kids started filing out of the large space, returning to their own conversations, the goth caught the vice president's arm.

"Hold up, Sophia," she said, lowering her voice some.

"Yeah, what's up, Violet?" the younger blinked.

Silence passed for a moment before the older let out a huff, putting her hands on her hips. "Thanks for the coffee this morning...and all this past week. You put a lot into keeping this club up, and I have something for you," she hummed, turning on a fairly platformed heel in the direction opposite of the main school exit.

The blonde followed her without question, and once again a smile tugged at her black-painted lips. God, this girl was so predictable.

"So, what is it?" she inquired, scrunching her eyebrows together.

"It's in my locker," the black haired girl grinned easily, "But..."

With a few more steps, the president snatched for the younger's wrist, forcing blue eyes to meet green.

"...Before we get to that, let it be known that I see through what you're doing, what with your special treatment."

The vice president let out a nervous laugh. "W-what are you talking about, Violet? You've kinda had it rough lately, so, I just--"

The goth cut her off. "If I didn't know any better, I'd say you had a crush on me."

All in one movement, the younger girl's eyes widened, her mouth closed, and her face flushed three shades of pink. Bingo. Oh, kids and their young love.

"You should know, I'm like a poison," she tugged at the wrist clenched in her hand, pulling the shorter girl in closer, to lean in towards her ear, "and I'm quite a heartbreaker."

Sophia averted her gaze, biting her lip gingerly. "So you say, but...I think there's more to you than your apathy," she whispered, flicking her eyes for contact before turning to the side again, probably to save her burning face some trouble.

The rush of the Love Game started to kick in, and Violet just couldn't help herself to the call. It spread through her veins like wildfire, the instinct of the hunt, and her prey braving out in the open like that; it was just so rich.

Craning her neck to loom towards the conch of the more vulnerable girl's ear, she purred, "Would you like to test that?"

A moment's hesitation, and a small gulping sound from the blonde's throat, and then, Violet let out a heavy chuckle. "All right, then."

She tore to the side, still holding the younger's wrist with an iron grip, directing a beeline straight into the girl's bathroom she had stopped in front of, and with a quick, simple jerk of the arm, she had the blonde in front of her, backed against the tile wall. Her black-painted lips cashed against those soft, delicate buds, and her untamed hands quickly found their way into that blonde hair.

Sophia let out only a faint whimper at the impact, but melted clumsily into the unexpected kiss. Within mere moments, a faint tremor in her inexperienced hands on her back betrayed her.

The president pulled away, admiring her handiwork with a cruel smirk. "Are you all right, dear?" she teased, fingering through that hair and taking with it the tie that bound it up, letting the golden locks fall freely down the other girl's shoulders. "You're trembling."

"Y-yeah, I've just...never felt it this strong before," the poor thing managed breathily, chest rising and falling visibly. Absolutely endearing.

Violet almost lunged right for her sweet again, but glanced over her shoulder, grunting with a mild frustration. "We could be seen from here," she commented thickly. She had hardly whet her lust, too.

All it took was another grip, the shoulder this time, and a harsh tug towards the other wall, and as far as the rest of the afterschoolers were concerned, out of sight, out of mind.

Immediately, the goth sank her lips down into the inviting home of the other's, freshly sticky with remnants of smeared lipstick. Exhillirated, the lesser experienced fumbled through the flow, tracing her hands up the taller's waist, still trembling.

Chuckling, the older ripped those hands away, pinning them to the supporting wall. Sophia started to slide down it, knees growing too weak to keep her standing, so of course the goth planted her own at the juncture of her crotch to keep her upright enough. The poor doe was practically melting to her touch, and it was that control that made this whole stupid game worthwhile.

Sadly, all good things must come to an end.

Just as the blonde had pressed a needy moan against her mouth, the tak-tak of other footsteps sounded from the door, followed by two voices.

Embittered, the president slunk away from her fun, staring in the face of the dazed blonde. The two girls who entered the bathroom froze behind her as she turned on the heel of her boot, likely at the sight of the smear of black lipstick that colored the blonde's lips grey. "Come along," she barked, agitation showing through. The intruders, likely student atheletes, parted a way for them without a word, stunned.

Once out, Violet turned to her new toy, green eyes scanning over her, suppressing her hunger back down to managable levels. Only a quick turn down the science hall lead them to her locker, which she opened without the vice president saying a word. She probably couldn't speak, after that kind of encounter with passion. Hell, she was still trembling a bit.

From her locker, the goth drew out a few pieces of paper: a handdrawn work of art, one she normally would have commisioned for about fifteen dollars, and the other, a document, outlining some terms to a rather unconventional type of relationship.

"Here you are, Sophia," she smiled, easily buttering up her edges to appear more softened.

As the blue eyes scanned over the page, her face lit up from pink to livid. "Th-this is," she stammered.

"Only if you'd like, my dear," the older cooed knowingly. "My lovers seem to come and go, but if you want something a little bit more permanent, well...I tend to show my servants my true colors."

Oh, Violet, you rotten, lecherous huntress, she thought proudly to herself, with what you just put that poor girl through, there's no way she can resist you. She's caught in your web, and a diligent type like her? She'll run herself ragged once she's addicted to you.

Those innocent eyes met with hers sternly, blush still clearly visible. "If it's what it takes to show you that y-you're worth more than this persona of yours, fine, I'll play your game."

The corners of her lips turned into her cheeks as she smiled so broadly it almost hurt. She planted a little kiss on the shorter's forehead, reaching her thumb up to wipe the smudged remains of her throes of passion, turning her hand to present the hair tie once more.

"Perfect," she simpered, feeling the vibrato in her chest as the other took her hair tie with her blush rising again.

And so she found herself, once again, winning at her own dastardly Love Game, and this time, she was playing for keeps.

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Re: [Oneshot] Love Game (PG-13)
« Reply #1 on: July 24, 2016, 09:48:26 pm »
I thought it was a cute funny story. I hope you make more.

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Re: [Oneshot] Love Game (PG-13)
« Reply #2 on: July 24, 2016, 10:11:19 pm »
I'm glad you enjoyed it. I may get around to making more eventually, but I find that writing much over two thousand words gets a little taxing. I've been working on something, but it's probably nothing worth posting yet, and I may not wind up posting it here simply because it's a fanfiction, although I do find that fanfiction can be a great tool if you use it to focus on the concepts behind the actual writing process.

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Re: [Oneshot] Love Game (PG-13)
« Reply #3 on: July 25, 2016, 03:43:11 am »
I'm glad you enjoyed it. I may get around to making more eventually, but I find that writing much over two thousand words gets a little taxing. I've been working on something, but it's probably nothing worth posting yet, and I may not wind up posting it here simply because it's a fanfiction, although I do find that fanfiction can be a great tool if you use it to focus on the concepts behind the actual writing process.

Oh well I getit. Sometimes I forget if I wrote over a thousand words if I am really in the groove. If you ever want to share it,that's fine.

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Re: [Oneshot] Love Game (PG-13)
« Reply #4 on: July 26, 2016, 01:13:26 am »
I haven't had the chance to read it yet. But once I do I'll let you know my thoughts.

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Re: [Oneshot] Love Game (PG-13)
« Reply #5 on: July 28, 2016, 09:55:01 am »
I've written yuri before but not like a comedy.

It's a good idea but I didn't really understand the characters too much. And I've read yuri comedies before.

Maybe it revolved around on elements joke too much for my tastes.

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Re: [Oneshot] Love Game (PG-13)
« Reply #6 on: July 28, 2016, 11:57:58 am »
Yeah, one of my friends pointed out that this feels more like a chapter two, in that there probably should have been more development in the characters first before jumping right in like that. What may wind up happening, since overall my feedback on the forum I originally posted this one was fairly positive, I may use this as a buffer between projects and wind up re-writing it and adding.

I'll also add that this was loosely, and I mean very loosely, based on a real-life scenario that I know of, albeit exaggerated and names/places changed, but the concept is kinda there. I also added some differences in personality, and I kinda took some inspiration, just a twinge, from the main character of Gantz for Violet. Luckily, despite taking from a concept from life, I still have practically infinite creative liberty with where to take it from here.

I still don't see exactly why both of you associated this with comedy, but I'll chalk that up to Violet's attitude.

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Re: [Oneshot] Love Game (PG-13)
« Reply #7 on: July 28, 2016, 05:29:16 pm »
I don't see how this is not intended for comedy. I do see it as an attempt of a gag. Maybe if they were a but more realistic or something else going on maybe.

It is a one shot too.

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Re: [Oneshot] Love Game (PG-13)
« Reply #8 on: July 28, 2016, 09:17:49 pm »
Kudos for not using Japanese names XD

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Re: [Oneshot] Love Game (PG-13)
« Reply #9 on: July 28, 2016, 10:56:27 pm »
Ooooo I didn't know you weren't trying for comedy. I just thought the combination was so hilarious that it looked like that was what you were going for.


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Re: [Oneshot] Love Game (PG-13)
« Reply #10 on: July 28, 2016, 11:33:21 pm »
Kudos for not using Japanese names XD

Ironic af

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Re: [Oneshot] Love Game (PG-13)
« Reply #11 on: July 29, 2016, 12:08:10 am »
Yeah, I admit that I snorted just a little bit with...I honestly don't know how that name is supposed to be read...and that irony.

The way I see it is that names have meaning, and I don't know enough Japanese to be able to make Japanese names go together and work well. (I don't do the Kanjis--aaah!) Besides, I'm an American, and recognize that my works, if published, should probably appeal to an English-speaking audience. It's less stress in both regards, that I know what kind of names I'm working with moreso and that it makes sense in my language. Besides, anime clubs exist here, too! I was in one in high school. (In an officer position, actually.)

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Re: [Oneshot] Love Game (PG-13)
« Reply #12 on: July 30, 2016, 12:20:52 am »
OK, I have always held back but please stop with the red. It is hard to read and very uncomfortable.

No this doesn't mean pick a new color, white just like everyone else uses would be fine.

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Re: [Oneshot] Love Game (PG-13)
« Reply #13 on: July 30, 2016, 06:50:24 am »
I suppose I can settle for the red text only in my signature. It just feels really...odd for me to not alter my text in some way. It's just something I've always done. (Ugh, I am such a creature of habit.)

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Re: [Oneshot] Love Game (PG-13)
« Reply #14 on: July 31, 2016, 01:59:26 am »
I use colors all the time and so does Orchid I believe.

Perhaps for every day conversation it's not a great idea. But I think it works well to make a story or header pop out.

I really like the forum's black background, white font. It allows more room to add more colors.

 

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