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Re: Blade Regalia
« Reply #60 on: December 15, 2017, 03:36:45 am »
I'm still experimenting with giving information. Here it's spoon-fed just like it is in a lot of popular anime.
they do not spoonfeed it like you just did. No one brings up heavy details of lore in casual conversation unless it's not a casual conversation.

 
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But I should let you know I have no intention of changing anything about Katherine. I will still be refining the story to make it easier to read, but her personality will stay the same.

I'm not asking you to change Katherine. I'm asking you to put more into it. Is it really so difficult to come up with a character with personality and make it obvious and natural?

Because characters don't act natural, your story doesn't make sense. I'm not going to read another chapter until you "fix" and "expand" the first one. No more do overs. Do you know why we get tired of giving you advise? It's the same advise. You simply cannot comprehend what makes a good character.

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SO I'm going to ask you the same question I always ask you every single time you make a new story with a new character: Why should the readers care about your main character based on what you revealed in the chapter so far.


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